day tripper

Fixed it. Thanks a lot(:

Ahh, okay. I was reading over your critique and I get what you mean now. I'm fixing it as we speak. Thanks(:

haha wow. This kinda sounds like my story that I have been posting on here. /: [Welcome to Miami] but whatever. It was neat. Just space it out more.

I really liked this. Like TNCowgirl stated, just remember the phrase: Fanboys it helps(: and yes, a little more work on puncuation and a tab more detail and this will ...

hah, then next chapter explains EVERYTHING. So hold tight(:

This is really good. I'm realy glad I decided to read this. You're a good writer, but maybe some more detail on Vienna or something, you know?

Huh? Haha sorry I'm lost.

Well see, this all happend so quick but Celia is so numb that she could barely keep track of what was going on. And when she was running out, that's ...

Thanks(: Yeah, I didn't know how to rephrase some of the sentances I used.

I could understand that writing is the best way to let this out. I congrate you. Here for comfort: I love you! d: I'm looking forward to chapter 4.

Wait, no! I'm not worried if there is more love parts on the way... Are you okay? Are you able to write about this? So this is ALL about you, ...

Haha; thanks sokool15: the main character is me. X: But no, she's supose to be like that in the begining. She changes, see, Aaron is like, hmm how should I ...

Ahh yes see, this is why I don't write poems. haha It was just something from when I was feeling down. The last time I wrote a poem was.... like ...

I liked the begining. It has a nice story line, an uncommon twist to it. The end was a little weird, but I guess everyone writes something a little weird ...

Yes I wrote it directly on the site. No rough drafts, no editing. It was like it was my heart was speaking. It hurt to write it, but I couldn't ...